I'm writing a story

Hey! I'm currently writing a story called comic strip. This is the first 3 chapters I got so far. Tell me what you think!

Comic Strip
Jake scrolled through his locker, looking for shoved pens he had left while he was in a rush to get to math. He found four pens, a pad of post-it notes, and one pencil. He shoved them in his pocket so he won’t be unprepared for any of his other classes. He closed his locker door, and locked it. Standing beside his locker was AJ, his only friend he had in the 11th grade. “Have you heard about the new girl?” he asked. AJ’s glasses were hanging off his face, and he was breathing heavily, obviously a sign that while he was going to his locker his asthma kicked in.
AJ was the typical nerd you saw in movies. Big glasses, smart, everything you thought a nerd realistically wasn’t. “Yea, I did, what about her?” Jake asked. “I don’t know, I was just asking. So do you have any classes with her?” “No, not so far” “Here she comes!” AJ exclaimed. The girl had choppy blonde hair, and wore red sweat pants and a red T-shirt. Jake personally thought she looked like a comic book character. As she walked closer, he gazed more and more. It seemed like he was hypnotized, in a trance, and couldn’t escape it. “Uh, do you know where locker C14 is?” the girl asked.
Jake froze. He felt like he couldn’t move. AJ looked at the girl, then at Jake, and then at the girl again. He needed to keep him from making a fool of himself. He nudged him and muttered “dude”. “Huh, what” “She asked you something…” he said looking at him like he was an alien, his face in horror, knowing that his plan didn’t work, and Jake still made a fool of himself. The girl just stood there, looking at Jake, expecting an answer. She quietly made an agitated sigh and repeated her question. “Do you know where locker C14 is?” she asked again.
“Oh umm yea, that’s next to my locker, I’m C15.” He said broken from his gaze, some what unaware of his surroundings. “cool.” She responded. Cool? Cool? What was that supposed to mean? Was she annoyed that they had to be so close to each other? Jake hesitated. “I’m Tracy by the way. Tracy umm...” she said thinking. “Tracy. That’s a cool name. You’re the only Tracy in our grade.” He said, trying to not embarrass himself once again. “Yeah, that’s cool I guess. Well, I need to put my binders in my locker and class is going to start soon and I don’t want to be late. Ok, see you around.” She said, some what cheerfully, but she seemed like she was hiding something.
“Okay, bye.” AJ and Jake walked away together, whispering so no one can hear their conversation. “I’m so stupid! I can’t believe I just froze there! Ugh I’m such an idiot!” Jake said, obviously angry at himself. “Uh you didn’t make a complete fool of yourself. I’ve seen worse things you have done that were horribly embarrassing.” AJ said, trying to cheer him up, but once again his plan was not working. “Thanks AJ, that’s very reassuring, takes all my stress away.” Jake replied spitefully, annoyed at AJ’s somewhat sarcastic comment. “Sorry, I was just trying to help. Hey, wasn’t there something weird about her?” AJ said curiously. “No, not really, she just moved here. You might have to give her a break AJ.” Jake said with an odd facial expression while speaking the sentence. “Well, didn’t you think it was quite odd that it sounded like she forgot her last name? Or her clothes! Most girls are covered from head to toe in Abercrombie and Hollister.” AJ said, obviously knowing the in style fashion around school. “Yeah that’s true. Well I don’t know. Maybe you should ask her. I bet she would appreciate it.” Jake said sarcastically. AJ muttered something that sounded like “Yea maybe you should ask her that.” The boys said their goodbyes, and both went separate ways. AJ went left, and Jake went right.
Chapter 2
At lunch, their were big crowds of girls and boys, all different, talking loudly which made the courtyard sound like Walt Disney World on a hot summer day.
Most tables were completely full, all except one. At that table sat AJ and Jake. AJ sprayed his nose with his prescribed nose spray that he needed for his allergies, as the popular girls stared and whispered in each others ears. Jake threw out all of his food because he wasn’t hungry, and sat back at the table. Jake was awfully quiet.
He was thinking about Tracy, and he was thinking about what AJ had said about her forgetting her last name. That was pretty weird. Jake looked over at the door and saw Tracy, carrying her tray, looking for an empty table. She slowly walked over to them, and placed her tray on the table. “Is anyone sitting here?” she asked. “Umm, no actually there isn’t” AJ said while Jake was in an odd gaze like earlier that day. “Okay then may I sit here?” she asked. “Sure” Jake said still staring, not even knowing what he had said sure to. She sat down and looked at AJ then Jake. “So… umm is there any umm hobbies you do?” she said, trying to break the awkward silence.
“Oh uh, yeah. I write comic books. But their not that good. I got rid of half of them a few days ago.” He said. The smile from her face was quickly turned into a frown. Why did she care if he threw away his babyish comic books? “Well, I just lost my appetite, and I have to leave school early. I’ll see you tomorrow.” She said again, hiding something. “Oh ok, see you tomorrow.” “Actually, would it be all right if I stop by after school?” she asked. “Umm sure I guess so. If you want to. What time should I be expecting your arrival?” What am I AJ?
“Is around 4:00 okay? “Yes, that’s perfect I’ll see you then. After Tracy left, Jake walked out of the courtyard, without saying a word to AJ. “Yea, I’m fine, just don’t say goodbye. Because I really appreciate it. It’s so thoughtful of you.” AJ shook his head, and finished his lunch. He pulled a book out of his bag and began to read.
Chapter 3
When Jake got home from school, he put his backpack away, quickly finished what wasn’t finished of his homework in work study, and then waited for Tracy. The doorbell rang. Jake quickly ran to the door and opened it. There, stood Tracy, with an angered face on. She pushed him aside and walked into the house. “What’s going on?” he asked “Where are your comic books?!” she exclaimed. “Uh, umm I don’t know! I told you I gave them away!” Jake said, confused on why she was so angry that his comic books are gone. “I need them!” she said frustrated. “Can you at least tell me what’s going on? Maybe then I can help you!” “Tell you? Tell you?! I can’t just tell you! One of those babyish comic books of yours was our only hope of saving the world!” Tracy said, breathing heavily. “Wait, what? Wait what do you mean by our?” Jake was overly confused. Tracy sighed and turned around. “Obviously I will have to tell you, but I doubt you will believe me.”

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Hi again... I would just like to apologize for not posting. I haven't really had time because of all the homework my teachers have given me, so it's hard to finish all work I didn't do, plus keeping my blog updated. I'm hoping to update it more often. Bye!
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